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perfection_means_nothing's Review for rukiblood
Sunday, May 1, 2011 9:54 PM

Title: Don't Touch My Ass
Author: rukiblood
Reviewer: perfection_means_nothing

Note: The author/s should know that I have nothing against him or her. I apologize if you find my review quite harsh or mean. Please know that I have been honest the entire time and I am doing this to improve your writing skills. Thank you for requesting from Caramel Esque.

Title - 5/10
Your title matches the mood of the story, but I am quite bored when I saw it. You made me yawn for like 5 times.

Appearance - 3/10
The poster colors are too dull for this kind of story. It kinda reminds me of how cheap Lady Gaga's new album looks like. Blegh!

Forewords - 4/10
Not very dragging, I have to say. Too plain here and there.

Plot - 14/20
There's that weird twist I always look forward to everytime I read FFs. That's probably the only thing I like in this story.

Orginality - 15/25
Not original and I've seen this more than 18 times this month.

Flow - 11/15
Nice and smooth. Nice. But I have to admit that you lost me in the first paragraph.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary - 14/25
I don't point out errors and all, but I appreciate how you used font colors and other options here. You used italic to make the text less boring than it was already. Call me picky because I barely care, but I saw some wrong spacing there. You chopped the sentences perfectly, and that's what writers miss often.

Characterization - 6/10
You made those people seem human enough. I like it.

Writing Style - 2/5
Like I mentioned already, I liked how you used font options to make it less boring. But I didn't exactly like how you used center for the letter Jessica sent.

Overall Enjoyment - 3/10
I have no sense of humor, so I didn't enjoy it. But I did like the twist there.

Total - 77/140

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